Why Not? I'll Tell You Where I've Been

[ScarletMornings]

I don’t have to answer
you own me evermore no longer
the ocean in the sky is getting closer
the gathering storm approaches swift
ready to pour that warm, ocean rain on our wind-ruffled heads
in this land you can taste it coming before it arrives

the patterns that I'm feeling warn
my Morse-coded heartbeat tells me that shattering is imminent
I’ve got to get away
sometimes you look at me like we could have the best
but it’s never been worth it before
honestly I don’t know if I believe it ever could be
I was waiting on you to change my mind

Failure loves the bitter taste of a lemon life
and he runs both ways in this little stand
I never could quite understand the sparkle in your eye
every time you smiled at the quarters in my hands
what gratification did you really find in the long run?
yet you hint your greatest prize was me

It’s hard to keep your head above the water
when the waves come from within
I'm splashing and thrashing in the backlash of a heart that knows
death by drowning is death by suffocation
I can’t breathe when I think of losing you
but I can’t live with the thought I'd wait for it to happen

I wonder why it’s so very hard to understand
so simple a question, I guess
you keep asking where I’ve gone
and somehow, I find, I'm still standing here
well, why not? I’ll tell you
this oceanwater rain falls warm on my fears
and that persuasive breeze tickles my tongue to tell
your eyes are wondering if it's love
and it was but it was something more
I’ve been to hell and back

[ScarletMornings]

is the italicizing and bolding weird? jw

[Ramona]

I think the italicizing and bolding kind of takes away form the poem, but just because it's so regularly placed, you know? Maybe you don't know, I'm probably not amking any sense. Anyway, I really liked this poem. Especially "wind-ruffled heads" for some reason. Makes me think of the beach.

[cry,crayola.]

i thought this was amazing! i loved it all, especially the ending. 'morse-coded heartbeat' stood out to me a lot. this is good stuff, rowe.

[ScarletMornings]

so, should i just take out the bolding and italicizing all together, or leave it, or move it somewhere else?

[cry,crayola.]

i really don't have a prob with italics, bolding might be much though....

[ScarletMornings]

so say no to the bold?

[Ramona]

Well, I think it's a bit too much because it's bolding and italicizing. Maybe just one or the other, or just not all in one line.

[ScarletMornings]

okay, how's this? i left hell bolded because i wanted it to be the main answer to my poem. is this better?

[Ramona]

Perfect.