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Post by ScarletMornings on Nov 16, 2005 14:53:38 GMT -8
If I forgot you would you care? does it even matter if I feel if I love if I walked away from every good memory? are they even memories to you? or did they just slip away? scattered to the four corners by your apathy? indifference it’s happened so many times I wonder if there are little piles of broken hearts lost in the desolation of places unreachable except to those who climb mountains and conquer countries who use them to plant their flags in, proudly waving the kind of people who send them there
I stood in the rain are the angels crying? trying to wash away to soothe those crumbled pieces of passion, of dreams to even out the terrain so the little mounds, odes to another love story gone wrong, won’t stand bitter testimony to the disillusion of it all? but why do they bother? the only ones who see it are the conquerors who sent them there it’s not like they ever cared in the first place don’t you see the pretty flags flying in another breeze of coming pain?
Are the deserts all the ashes of loves? huge, shifting, timeless dunes hearts turned to sand after so long without water love aren’t they the same to the heart? so very essential devoid of, we’re just dust in the wind so many grains of nothing except an annoyance that gets in your eyes and makes them water stinging reminders of the tears they all cried so long ago so soon ago cover your face here comes a dust storm, a sand storm, a wind storm of broken hearts of disillusion blown in by the conquerors of the lands they made and the lands they broke I see the foreshadows everywhere can almost hear the flags snapping in the breeze here they come again
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Post by behindTHEmask on Nov 16, 2005 15:26:48 GMT -8
Beautiful.
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Post by Ramona on Nov 17, 2005 9:03:14 GMT -8
Once again, ScarletMornings, I wish I had your talent. I love the second stanza, I love rain as a symbol, and the way you used it was just awesome.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Nov 21, 2005 19:35:43 GMT -8
thank you guys! i really appreciate the comments. *although i'm sad you guys are the only ones who've commented....
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Post by ScarletMornings on Nov 23, 2005 21:22:29 GMT -8
anyone wanna comment?? pwease?
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Post by cry,crayola. on Nov 25, 2005 14:54:19 GMT -8
i'm here to save the day!!!!!!!!!
i really liked it a lot. i agree with ramona. everything she said about the second stanza and your talent. i'm stealing it from you, it's decided. *sneaks into sara's room and attempts to steal it* awww man..........it's locked. curse you, dreaded lock!!!!!!!
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