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Nov 3, 2005 15:11:13 GMT -8
Post by cry,crayola. on Nov 3, 2005 15:11:13 GMT -8
ok, guys. tell me what you think. this is dedicated to my buddy sara (scarletmornings) btw. hehe!
encouraging words always but nagging my darling, can't you see? the words from your mind, your beautiful mind, flow softly and gracefully my words, beloved, tumbling down crags and cliffs, are only doomed to fall, to fail. if you only understood, my love, you would see why - why the world around you stops at your words but only points and laughs at mine why all stops because you take their breath away when i only make them choke words, my dear, are your gift, not mine god has blessed you, darling but to me, i have not been granted such a luxury for everything i think, i write, is flat. but you, your thoughts, are heaven, pure bliss.
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Nov 3, 2005 15:22:51 GMT -8
Post by ScarletMornings on Nov 3, 2005 15:22:51 GMT -8
awww, cindy, you're the best. i wish you would believe in yourself! this is a fantastic poem, since you edited it, i think it's perfect. i'm totally nominating it for november. WONDERFUL!!
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Nov 3, 2005 15:26:21 GMT -8
Post by cry,crayola. on Nov 3, 2005 15:26:21 GMT -8
i'm not sure about the part where i mention everything stopping. i used the word stop twice. should i use another word? thoughts anyone?
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Nov 3, 2005 15:33:18 GMT -8
Post by ScarletMornings on Nov 3, 2005 15:33:18 GMT -8
i like the repetition of it- it emphasizes how important it seems like your friends (cough, cough*hard to stay objective, here* cough cough), words are.
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Nov 4, 2005 9:00:09 GMT -8
Post by Ramona on Nov 4, 2005 9:00:09 GMT -8
Aw, come on, I for one enjoy your words (and ScarletMornings') This is just another nice piece of yours, I like the format.
Ramona
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