Satin and Satire- Revised the Slightest Bit

[ScarletMornings]

Satin and satire
oh the irony of it all
the smooth textured tones
of both
caress me and mock me
wouldn't you expect irony to be rough?
no, I guess not
but I guess I expected
that I'm not what you want

My mood is in emeralds
I drape about my neck
why can you look and see
something you don’t care for
you’re looking for something classic
but I guess they say diamonds are forever
who cares about emeralds?

Oh the silky feel
of irony on my skin
tickles my fancy
in the darkest way possible
I wrap the night about my shoulders
sprinkle stars in my hair
and set off to be elegant
when all you want is beautiful
funny when I finally try
satin is out of style

Fingertips trace
the smoothness of my skin
on loan from the roses
in the gardens of my dreams
skim over the graceful line of my back
borrowed from the willow by the river
were if it were only your fingertips
rather than the romantic wind’s
lovingly ruffling my senses
whispering through the glow about me
stolen from the moon

Strange, how tonight I don’t just dance
I glide through the steps
a swan out of water
but still in her element
long and soft and lovely
whirling gently through the dulcet tones of elegance
a waltz
a goddess far out of reach

Finally I am the mirror of a woman
a true lady
emerald elegance
I finally do everything right
isn’t it funny
ironic
satirical
that you’re out in the garden
with a diamond?
her laughter dances along my spine
emeralds are my satin satire

[Queen of Rain]

SO amazing, fav line is definately "Oh the silky feel
of irony on my skin"... I lvoe the ending, the feeling of crashed hope is so real!
I feel the beginning of the poem could be more condensed though

[Ramona]

Wow, I think this has such great comparisons between diffferent things and the way you drew lines between them is just amazing. As always, a beautiful piece.

Ramona

[cry,crayola.]

you continue to mock me with your talent........flaunting it in my face so carelessly..............so appreciated............so wanted?...............*sigh*................... dear rouge canadian you amaze me once again.

~your yankee fan! lol

[onemoremile]

I hate rating poetry without trying to pick out something that can be improved, otherwise I feel like my comment is worthless. However, I can find a single thing i'd change in this poem - it's perfect!

[ScarletMornings]

wow, thank you!