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Post by behindTHEmask on Sept 29, 2005 15:52:39 GMT -8
I think the title should be reworded, but it's the point of the entire poem.
Raped Innocence.
You cry out so loud, but no one ever hears your voice so faint behind the dancing shadows that cover wreaking disaster.
Innocence was ripped from your eyes, stolen by the undeserving and used to the advantage that gained you nothing but bad name.
Secrets spread through ears and fall silently off lips with owners that won’t renounce this fabricated battle of diseased words.
Your voice isn’t much of a voice now that you’ve been taken from yourself and given to another, to be used against you.
Fairness breaches through no walls and offers no council to side with you, the guiltless girl, the naïve child, who knew nothing.
These lessons in life are never printed in black and white, but gained through experiences that haunt you, leaving you screaming when you’re dumb, and seeing when you’re blind.
They leave you feeling guilty by the stares that state anything but the moment, where you conditioned yourself to believe them.
You cry out so loud but your voice is ignored because the truth is never as exciting as the mendacities whispered in the sunlit shadows.
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Post by ScarletMornings on Sept 29, 2005 18:54:24 GMT -8
wow. that. was. amazing. beautiful language and imagery. fantastic idea. amazing.
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Post by Ramona on Sept 30, 2005 7:33:37 GMT -8
I especially love the sixth stanza. The imagery in this is so imaginative, yet so easily understood.
Ramona
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Post by Queen of Rain on Sept 30, 2005 9:18:23 GMT -8
beautiful, amazing.. a little too wordy but nice elaborated rhythm
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