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Post by Sparks on Jan 21, 2005 14:03:54 GMT -8
vfv
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Post by quilleh on Jan 21, 2005 14:08:10 GMT -8
Whoah. Thats very deep, and relate-able.
What inspired you to write this?
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Post by Sparks on Jan 22, 2005 14:12:41 GMT -8
I was in a mood... if you know what it's like.
There wasn't any particular inspiration. Actually, I was thinking about a funeral I went to in early November.
But it wasn't really about that.
And I'm interested that you found it deep. Was there any real reason?
But thanks. I really appreciate it a lot.
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Post by Ramona on Jan 22, 2005 15:02:48 GMT -8
That was an wicked awesome piece. I loved the different analogies you drew and the way you used words in unusual (good thing) ways. It was sad, and it had underlying tones of romance, but you twisted in a simplicity that made it so primitively unique, and easy to understand. The descriptiojns were right on, and your choice of language excellent.
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Post by kaidanasnan on Jan 22, 2005 15:44:24 GMT -8
I loved it. Like Sticky Wicket said, the analogies you made were awesome. It seemed like you took something simple and changed it, adding depth to it. I loved it.
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Post by quilleh on Jan 22, 2005 19:18:06 GMT -8
Perhaps the depth was found there, because I had a good friend of mine die in a car crash this summer, and therefore, this is relateable. That sucked.
I ALSO liked the analagies, 'specially
"The rain sparked an electrical fire in the rest of them.
All I am is wet."
BRILLIANT.
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Post by Sparks on Jan 23, 2005 7:05:06 GMT -8
I'm glad you all liked it... thanks for the many comments.
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Post by quilleh on Jan 24, 2005 15:42:23 GMT -8
Sparks- Would you mind terribly, if I typed up my own, but simular version of this? I don't have plans to use it for anything, I'd just really like to write something along the same idea.
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Post by Sparks on Jan 25, 2005 13:14:04 GMT -8
Umm ....
Okay...the thing about this one is that I feel kind of close to it.
It's not at all my business what you write for yourself, but if all you're planning on doing is writing the same thing as this, I'm not sure why you need to.
I mean, if it, I guess, inspired you for some reason, I don't have any problem with that.
If it's not the same thing, don't worry about my permission, tons of topics have been redone over and over again...it would be stupid for me to tell you not to.
But if it is the same thing, I don't know if you'll get what you want out of it, because whether I'm ready to admit it or not, a lot in this piece is actually about me.
I don't know where I'm going with this.
In the end I guess I don't really care.
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Post by quilleh on Jan 25, 2005 14:11:43 GMT -8
It won't be exactly like this; I've plans for my own, but you know...just a simular plot line.
I don't want to make you feel invaded, so if you don't mind thats great, but if you do, thats cool too.
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Post by Sparks on Jan 25, 2005 14:22:13 GMT -8
It doesn't really matter.
Don't worry about it.
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Post by writingfool73 on Oct 22, 2005 12:21:35 GMT -8
That was brillent it was so good
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Post by ScarletMornings on Nov 7, 2005 13:38:33 GMT -8
wooow. that's all i got to say is wow. the eloquence of this has temporarily knocked me speechless. this is a perfect piece to deal with death. i just... wow.
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Post by Ramona on Nov 8, 2005 8:12:20 GMT -8
As always I continue to worship your talent. This was great, so much emotion and the way you described your feelings made me feel them, too.
Ramona
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Post by ScarletMornings on Nov 8, 2005 20:09:41 GMT -8
can we put this in the hof?
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