Re: Gone

ScarletMornings Administration http://www.americanpoems.com/poets/ednamillay/7278 Posts: 1,061	Re: Gone May 3, 2005 19:23:57 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ScarletMornings on May 3, 2005 19:23:57 GMT -8 i'm not sure. i really like the idea, but i think the language could have been more creative. it was a tiny bit cliche? great job besides that.
	"Down, down, down into the darkness of the grave, Gently they go, the beautiful, the tender, the kind; Quietly they go, the intelligent, the witty, the brave. I know. But I do not approve. And I am not resigned." -- Edna St. Vincent Millay, from "Dirge Without Music" Go to the link and read it!

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Re: Gone May 4, 2005 9:54:09 GMT -8

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Post by Confusion on May 4, 2005 9:54:09 GMT -8

Hey sorry,

I deleted my poem due to the crudyness of it.. i think im gonna take the good lines from it and make it into something better!

Sorry though, i've made your post seem lonely, so i thought id write this so it's not all on its own ;D

"One day I'll be a rainbow belly just like you," she whispered in his ear, "I'll cover painful scars with the brightest tattoos. I want to be a rainbow belly just like you."

ScarletMornings Administration http://www.americanpoems.com/poets/ednamillay/7278 Posts: 1,061	Re: Gone May 4, 2005 21:16:42 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ScarletMornings on May 4, 2005 21:16:42 GMT -8 thank you. i did feel lonely.
	"Down, down, down into the darkness of the grave, Gently they go, the beautiful, the tender, the kind; Quietly they go, the intelligent, the witty, the brave. I know. But I do not approve. And I am not resigned." -- Edna St. Vincent Millay, from "Dirge Without Music" Go to the link and read it!

Post by ScarletMornings on May 3, 2005 19:23:57 GMT -8

Post by Confusion on May 4, 2005 9:54:09 GMT -8

Post by ScarletMornings on May 4, 2005 21:16:42 GMT -8