Post by snuffles on Feb 2, 2005 14:04:08 GMT -8
=> During the Second Age of Mensmentis, the land was in turmoil. Sickness and death sprouted in homes and toppled entire kingdoms. Blood was shed within the bowels of cities and towns. Good succumbed to bad. Evil fed off of the pure. And darkness crept into the hearts of even the strongest...
=> Alas, Mensmentis had not always been like this. The First Age had brought light and happiness. Elves and pixies lived amongst dwarves and hobbits. Goodness united them and strength combines them. The land was a pure place; not a dark thought was thought and not a drop of blood was shed. They were all equal and equal they thought they should remain.
=> Twas the birth of Annuvin that brought evil unto the kingdom. Born in the High Mountains, Annuvin’s glare pierced the courage of any man who dared look into his eyes. His eyes held malice that poisoned the mind, his face held evil that sent lions scurrying to their hide-holes. Annuvin was not one to be reckoned with, and he knew it. And for this reason, he thought to rule Mensmentis.
It's not done yet and it's my first time writing. Critique?
=> Alas, Mensmentis had not always been like this. The First Age had brought light and happiness. Elves and pixies lived amongst dwarves and hobbits. Goodness united them and strength combines them. The land was a pure place; not a dark thought was thought and not a drop of blood was shed. They were all equal and equal they thought they should remain.
=> Twas the birth of Annuvin that brought evil unto the kingdom. Born in the High Mountains, Annuvin’s glare pierced the courage of any man who dared look into his eyes. His eyes held malice that poisoned the mind, his face held evil that sent lions scurrying to their hide-holes. Annuvin was not one to be reckoned with, and he knew it. And for this reason, he thought to rule Mensmentis.
It's not done yet and it's my first time writing. Critique?