Choices

[Ramona]

To me the ending just doesn't sound right, but I just finished it really quickly. I plan to expand on it more if I have time (in other words, if I don't get lazy.)

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Choices are the worst to make,
Since there’s so much to choose,
To choose to be a friend or more,
Or choose to win or lose.

To choose between his grainy cheek,
And my fingers sliding down her hips,
To choose between his dimpled back,
And her laughter-parted lips.

A choice to make is far worse when,
The language you must speak,
Is one of love and not of words,
But of feelings thought unique.

To choose between her windswept hair,
And the skin inside his thighs,
To choose between her graceful neck,
And the spark of laughter in his eyes.

For choosing is a better fate,
Than to choose nothing at all,
For standing is a better thing,
Than it is to trip and fall.

[Confusion]

is this about choosing which sexuality path to take?.. seems like it might be with all the choosings between the 'he's' and 'she's'

I like this!.. although i think when u extend it you could include more emotion... and the ending is a bit abrupt, but this could be realli good!

[Ramona]

Yeah, that's what it's about, I was going to end it with something like "Why do I have to choose?" type thingy.

[Confusion]

sounds gd!

[Queen of Rain]

i really think this is original and amazing! it gets attention through its slight controversy and it attracts deep thoughts tru its beautiful language which gives the poem a 2nd level.. rhtyhm is a bit off in " make is far worse when, The language" otherwise i think its great!!

[Confusion]

i agree!!