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Post by roxiecheerchika on Jul 11, 2005 11:13:05 GMT -8
Hi, I posted this a while ago...I was just wondering wut u think of it.
shattered dream and broken hearts fill the night skies with stars straight lines crossing "t's" and dotting "i's" while sipping sweet tea on a warm summer night day dreaming of days gone by when the air was cold and clouds guarded the sky when moments were precious and the sweet taste of honey lingered gently coating our throats and carassing our dreams lifting the foggy veils to see the unseen with extended hands trying to escape the past swiftly turning out thoughts from the times before while resting our eyes for just a few moments in time
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Post by Confusion on Jul 11, 2005 11:18:06 GMT -8
i realli, realli like this!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! simple and short, but says everythnig it should!!
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Post by Confusion on Jul 11, 2005 11:18:39 GMT -8
hehe, i exalted you!
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Post by ScarletMornings on Jul 11, 2005 19:33:34 GMT -8
WOW! i haven't really seen a lot of your work, and I wonder why? You are really good! This is a wonderful poem, great imagery, beautiful language. I LOVE THIS! Great job!
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Post by Ramona on Jul 12, 2005 18:04:43 GMT -8
I really like this poem, especially how you regarded the clouds as 'guarding the sky.'
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Post by roxiecheerchika on Jul 13, 2005 6:57:33 GMT -8
Thank you all, i needed that boost of confidence!
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Post by Queen of Rain on Jul 16, 2005 15:21:58 GMT -8
amaaazing imagery! amazing vocab and flow... but maybe there shud be shattered dreamS, just ,more logic to me... well its amazing, i tell u that
btw is ur name roxette?
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Post by roxiecheerchika on Jul 16, 2005 15:58:54 GMT -8
oOoOo i see what you meant. It is actually shattered dreams..just a spelling error. ...and no, i wish my name was roxette thought. Its alexandria....lexi for short
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Post by Queen of Rain on Jul 17, 2005 1:19:13 GMT -8
lesi is cute... ok i wondered cos if i ever gets kids im gonna name my daughter Roxette as it is a v pretty name, and the best band ever...
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Post by Confusion on Jul 17, 2005 6:20:25 GMT -8
i didnt know there was a band called roxette... but it is a very pretty name!
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Post by roxiecheerchika on Jul 18, 2005 6:52:16 GMT -8
lol...roxette is an awesome name and band..love it so much.. always wished it was my name.
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Post by Confusion on Jul 18, 2005 7:44:44 GMT -8
hehe!!! it is a very dudey name!
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