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Post by Queen of Rain on May 16, 2005 1:44:57 GMT -8
As I close my eyes I imagine the smell of white soap
What are the rules
of attraction tonight?
You seduce me
with your words
every night
but will bodies
be enough
this time?
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Post by Confusion on May 16, 2005 7:29:28 GMT -8
Short and sweet! The words you use are very concise and it flows very well!! Good job!  |
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Post by Pseudomuse on May 16, 2005 9:09:41 GMT -8
sweet...I really like the title too.
cheers PM
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Post by Queen of Rain on May 16, 2005 12:34:37 GMT -8
thank you.. the title relates to the person this poem is about... i connect him with that particular "white soap" smell.. but i spose that is not whough to build a relationship on, thus the poem..
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Post by Ramona on May 21, 2005 10:19:01 GMT -8
really nice. Short and to the point.
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