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Post by Queen of Rain on May 8, 2005 10:46:53 GMT -8
Who taught you how to breath?
This is just one
of the parentheses in life
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Post by Confusion on May 9, 2005 13:16:45 GMT -8
it's not realli a poem......  Although is a great idea and i think it would be realli good with just a couple of lines added? just a suggestion. |
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Post by ScarletMornings on May 9, 2005 18:24:55 GMT -8
i really like the idea of breathing as a parentheses, very cool, but i agree, maybe it could have a little more substance?
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Post by Pseudomuse on May 9, 2005 20:47:01 GMT -8
I really like it, maybe in this piece or another you could expand on it, but whatever, its'all good.
PM
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Post by Queen of Rain on May 9, 2005 23:24:53 GMT -8
I actaully do regard it as a poem, i jsut got the sentences in my head and this was all there was to say around it, i mite find sth else to say someday but i really like short poems and think that condensation is the difference between poetry and prose.
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