Imaginary boy

[Confusion]

A child's best friend,
Not real,
A fake.

A comfort,
A strength,
There for eternity,
Or until the end of childhood.

Not for me,
Not then,
Growing up too young,
But I'll never grow out of you.

I think,
And in someways hope,
You will be with me from now to the end.

You are him,
Yet not,
In such minor petty ways,
No skin,
No bones.

Yet such a glorious soul,
Such a tender heart,
Now try and say you're a lie.

You are my very own world of wonderful,
You say all the things I want you to say,
You do all the things I want you to do,
Every moment is perfect,
My life,
Your life,
Only in my head,
Only the way I want.

You are the one to hold my hand when no one else will,
Yet no one shall ever see.

Shocked back to life,
Back to the world,
To where we call real,
Yet no where is real without you,
Life is cold,
I only see the wind,
The rain,
The dark,
The frost,
The chills.

All a deep pit of emptyness,
All within me,
Sawing at my soul.

I see life as it is for the first time,
Life as I always knew it is yet hid from,
Ran away from,
I ran away with you,
Yet you're not a you,
Not an it,
Just a thought,
A thought I've grown attached to,
A thought I have relations with.

I'm lonely,
Lonely and pathetic.

Pathetic.

[Queen of Rain]

hello.. i loooove your ideas... i however find your language to 2blabby" its too much prose too little poetry in it somehow... try to forulate more things hidden so that the reader can figure out how the imaginary friend is not really the perfect solution... i think you can do it since you produce excellent lines like "A thought I have relations with."

[darktears]

I really liked it. I just think, you should work a little more at it, to make it perfect! Otherwise, nice job

[Confusion]

hi thanx so much for your great comments!

i have edited quite a lot of it... I'm not sure if im happy with it or not, please say what you think.

[Confusion]

any comments on the improvements made?

[Queen of Rain]

still loove the ideas, you could work more on sentences like "Yet real to the child, As real as can be." because its weird, like an attempt to be poetic but that just turns out weird.. however i need ot comment on your amaaaazing listing it really adds so muich to the poetry and its theme.. same thing with strucure so it you work on som if the 5 word sentences in the vbeginning of the poem, this will b soo perfect,,,

[Confusion]

Thanxies!

i've edited some of the kindsa lines you mentioned but havent spent much time on it yet... what do ya think to the way it is atm?