I Love You Poem (1)

Pseudomuse
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I Love You Poem (1) Apr 21, 2005 17:39:20 GMT -8

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Post by Pseudomuse on Apr 21, 2005 17:39:20 GMT -8

to go along with me short story Walk with me (it's under short stories). This is from the view of Maria (pronounced Mariah). And it's layout, formatting is based off of Paul Eluard's poem Je t'aime. I have no idea even if I am going to title it. At first I think not, maybe if someone comes up with something that would be great.

PM

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I love you for all the people you’ve touched
I love you for all the times in which you’ve lived for me
For the charcoal breath of angels and the fragrance of marigolds
For the soft summers and moonlit walks
For the innocence you let me believe in
I love you to love
I love you for all the people I can not love
Because I love you so deeply
Without you I am nothing but a porcelain doll
Forgotten and nostalgic in the right light
There have been times I wished I could scream at you for
I have not been able to love through your sheltering and that
Crushes me
I’ve had to learn life through others (mostly you)
How one forgets
To live, to love on their own
I love you for your knowledge and wisdom which will never be mine
For sketches
I love you against everything you have done
The pushing and pulling, the illusion of apathy
For the immortal sense that this is a-once-in-a-lifetime love which I have no power over
You think that you are unworthy but you are a kindersavior
You are the moments of fluttering butterflies that caress
my insides at the most intimate of moments
When I know I love you

You'll never be quite the same again after that Bible you've been thumping all these years finally has enough and beats the living s**t out of you. - Horoscope in "The Onion"

I thought you just said we were done doing things the stupid way.

If you want to call me that, smile.

Of all the gin joints in all the towns in all the world, she walks into mine.

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I Love You Poem (1) Apr 22, 2005 6:12:19 GMT -8

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Post by Queen of Rain on Apr 22, 2005 6:12:19 GMT -8

you must be one of few poets which can use teh phrase "i love you" in a poem so many times and totally avoiding the clicheness and naivity that usually follows! im still so amazed... "Without you I am nothing but a porcelain doll" feels wrong, too many words in the beginning of that line to create a nice rhythm... but i mean, overall im once again amazed by ur poetic skills

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Pseudomuse Senior Writer We went, we saw, we didn't quite conquer. Posts: 489	I Love You Poem (1) Apr 23, 2005 20:32:27 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Pseudomuse on Apr 23, 2005 20:32:27 GMT -8 yeah I am going to try and revise that line "porcelin doll" one. I think the whole "i love you" thing goes with the poem format. check it out its a good poem. thanks for the love. PM
	You'll never be quite the same again after that Bible you've been thumping all these years finally has enough and beats the living s**t out of you. - Horoscope in "The Onion" I thought you just said we were done doing things the stupid way. If you want to call me that, smile. Of all the gin joints in all the towns in all the world, she walks into mine.

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