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Post by roxiecheerchika on Apr 17, 2005 12:55:45 GMT -8
shattered dream and broken hearts fill the night skies with stars straight lines crossing "t's" and dotting the "i's" while sipping sweet tea on a warm summer night day dreaming of days gone by when the air was cold and clouds guarded the sky when moments were precious and the sweet taste of honey lingered gently coating our throats and carassing our dreams lifting the foggy veils to see the unseen with extended hands trying to escape the past swiftly turning out thoughts from the times before while resting our eyes for just a few moments in time
tell me what you think!?!
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Post by Queen of Rain on Apr 18, 2005 7:16:45 GMT -8
oo i like it... em daydreaming is one word i think, however it works excellent as two words in the title as it becomes a play on words which emphasises your poem...
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Post by roxiecheerchika on Apr 18, 2005 11:39:48 GMT -8
lol...oops...well either way, thankies alot!
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Post by frontpagenews on Apr 19, 2005 20:22:49 GMT -8
oooh I love this poem, for a love poem it is very very refreshing and that is awesome one suggestion instead of putting "crossing "t's" and dotting the "i's"" maybe write crossing "t's" and dotting "i's" just leave the (the) out
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