A Southern Summer Soliloquy

[Pseudomuse]

A Southern Summer Soliloquy

I can’t change you when I can’t change me
And I know you want me to
You spelled it out under the nightshade
On sultry, sweltry summer nights
Where lemonade and mosquito netting was a
Constant
Necessity
And stapled to the neon flashing Tiki lights draped on the awning
Were wanted posters we made for ourselves
And at the time we thought they were funny
But now
With broken promises and littered goodbyes
Settling on my dashboard
I’m not so sure about past times and faulted regrets
They’re empty where I’m goin’<br>And it’s strait back to your heart, no passing go or collecting 200 dollars
It would take too much time
Time
That I don’t have
To tell you
I can’t change you when I can’t change me
But that doesn’t me We can’t

[Queen of Rain]

really nice poem which was a nice variation since it was very modern... i loved the easy flow in language and still so beuatiful symbols, "And I know you want me to ‘cause " kinda stops the rhythm though... alöso i ponder over the necessity to have the (a) within parenthesis, could be nice to let this poem live without parenteses... i think the beginning is mayube almost too simple compared to the flow of beautiful words that follow but thats perhaps only cos were used to ur complicated beautifyl things and hence misjudge this a little more simple beutiful poem..

[Pseudomuse]

thank you hon. I took 'cause out, icky word it is, and the a is no longer in parentheses. When I first wrote this poem I had it "Where lemonade and mosquito netting was (were)
Constant" with no "necessity" there that's why the a was in parentheses, it didn't fit right, with the first draft, but now it does. thanks again.

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[Queen of Rain]

god even better... im sickly impressed by ur poetic talent, now this poem is amazing...

[roxiecheerchika]

I really liked it! I luv ur still of writing.....when i write deep or thoughtful poems the messgae is always so clear to see....But urs.....you write so beautifully! I love how you can write something so simple yet have it be so deep.....and the best thing is even though yours doesnt rhyme it still flows so well...How do you manage that? I mostly focus on rhyming in mine.