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Queen of Rain
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I'm Swedish, that should explain it all..

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In Paradise Apr 3, 2005 6:48:27 GMT -8

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Post by Queen of Rain on Apr 3, 2005 6:48:27 GMT -8

The marks of an angel landing
In the dusty morning light
On that empty beach a quiet morning
You’re an angel on earth
Very fallen

Drawn to you
Curious enchanted
What happens when that rope is put
Around the neck, a little tighter?
And the swing stops slowly
Stillborn

So I want to go there
To you
Your vampire teeth
Satin sheets
Come angels protect me
From my innermost feelings
For fallen angel

Last Edit: Apr 3, 2005 6:49:15 GMT -8 by Queen of Rain

A ship in a harbour is safe, but that's not what a ship is built for

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In Paradise Apr 3, 2005 9:25:54 GMT -8

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Post by ScarletMornings on Apr 3, 2005 9:25:54 GMT -8

Wow. Like, totally wow. I loved that poem. it was so. . . something. but it was just amazing. I loved some of the lines in it, and it had such amazing imagery and good word choice. there's nothing i would change. it was amazing.

"Down, down, down into the darkness of the grave,
Gently they go, the beautiful, the tender, the kind;
Quietly they go, the intelligent, the witty, the brave.
I know. But I do not approve. And I am not resigned."

-- Edna St. Vincent Millay,
from "Dirge Without Music"

Go to the link and read it!

ScarletMornings Administration http://www.americanpoems.com/poets/ednamillay/7278 Posts: 1,061	In Paradise Apr 3, 2005 9:31:35 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ScarletMornings on Apr 3, 2005 9:31:35 GMT -8 hmmm. i said amazing a lot in retrospect. but it was. and i don't think i properly conveyed my adoration for this poem. i LOVED it. sooo much. soo good. so fantastical, and just neat-o!!! wow.
	"Down, down, down into the darkness of the grave, Gently they go, the beautiful, the tender, the kind; Quietly they go, the intelligent, the witty, the brave. I know. But I do not approve. And I am not resigned." -- Edna St. Vincent Millay, from "Dirge Without Music" Go to the link and read it!

Queen of Rain Senior Writer I'm Swedish, that should explain it all.. Posts: 614	In Paradise Apr 3, 2005 9:34:42 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Queen of Rain on Apr 3, 2005 9:34:42 GMT -8 i fell very flattered by your admiration, thank you..
	A ship in a harbour is safe, but that's not what a ship is built for

ScarletMornings Administration http://www.americanpoems.com/poets/ednamillay/7278 Posts: 1,061	In Paradise Apr 3, 2005 9:35:39 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by ScarletMornings on Apr 3, 2005 9:35:39 GMT -8 no, thank you!!!
	"Down, down, down into the darkness of the grave, Gently they go, the beautiful, the tender, the kind; Quietly they go, the intelligent, the witty, the brave. I know. But I do not approve. And I am not resigned." -- Edna St. Vincent Millay, from "Dirge Without Music" Go to the link and read it!

Queen of Rain Senior Writer I'm Swedish, that should explain it all.. Posts: 614	In Paradise Apr 7, 2005 8:54:58 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Queen of Rain on Apr 7, 2005 8:54:58 GMT -8 should I retitle it??? I feel that I want to emphasise the child strangled by swing more, shoudl it perhapås be called something with playfround or park??
	A ship in a harbour is safe, but that's not what a ship is built for

Post by Queen of Rain on Apr 3, 2005 6:48:27 GMT -8

Post by ScarletMornings on Apr 3, 2005 9:25:54 GMT -8

Post by ScarletMornings on Apr 3, 2005 9:31:35 GMT -8

Post by Queen of Rain on Apr 3, 2005 9:34:42 GMT -8

Post by ScarletMornings on Apr 3, 2005 9:35:39 GMT -8

Post by Queen of Rain on Apr 7, 2005 8:54:58 GMT -8