untitled

Queen of Rain
Senior Writer

I'm Swedish, that should explain it all..

Posts: 614

untitled Apr 3, 2005 0:45:46 GMT -8

Quote

Post by Queen of Rain on Apr 3, 2005 0:45:46 GMT -8

Frist draft, Poem inpspired by Tony Craig's wallsculpture at Tate Modern - London

A masterpiece
hunitng us down
eating the young
from inside

Our selfbuild image
- perfection of humanity
is descending the plastic
comming alive

art of millenium
that archeologists dream
alive forever in recycling death

those colours strangle
our child,
awaitening birth
- stillborn its parents

A ship in a harbour is safe, but that's not what a ship is built for

Queen of Rain Senior Writer I'm Swedish, that should explain it all.. Posts: 614	untitled Apr 14, 2005 9:45:38 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Queen of Rain on Apr 14, 2005 9:45:38 GMT -8 need to change the 3rd stanza, anyone got an idea?
	A ship in a harbour is safe, but that's not what a ship is built for

Sparks Almost Senior Writer With Love, The Underground. Posts: 301	untitled Apr 17, 2005 8:44:18 GMT -8 Quote Select Post Deselect Post Link to Post Member Give Gift Back to Top Post by Sparks on Apr 17, 2005 8:44:18 GMT -8 I don't think you should change the third stanza, I liked that one best. If I changed anything it would definitely be the first one. <3
	Big A, Little a, bouncing B. The system might have got you but it won't get me.

Post by Queen of Rain on Apr 3, 2005 0:45:46 GMT -8

Post by Queen of Rain on Apr 14, 2005 9:45:38 GMT -8

Post by Sparks on Apr 17, 2005 8:44:18 GMT -8