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Post by Pseudomuse on Apr 1, 2005 19:06:00 GMT -8
this used to be untitled...
angels manned (with) firesticks and
sectioned methodmonologues
are vivid in my infidelic creams
but you’re there with
peter pan smiles and
tinkerbell mischief
we speak in codedlullabies
and lost boys fly by our bedroom door
and although blackcrows
swashandbuckle in dark shadows and
Hook is a dashingdane
we still parade around
in Technicolor and old flannel
around the blue lagoon filled with
butterflies that is our imagination
And white linen is all we buy(have)
because blood looks better on white
we’re vain
And that’s okay
(wendy is etched into my
back like a branded tattoo
and you save me from a
Mephistopheles
that rips and squelches
primroseremedies
for loneliness)
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Post by ScarletMornings on Apr 1, 2005 20:15:47 GMT -8
WOOHOO! I never get tired of reading your work! it is also sooooo freaking fascinating!!!!!!!!!!!!!! maybe you could call this the vanity of peter pan? i don't know, that was random. or technicolor and old flannel. that's a cool line. hell, all of these are cool lines. and pardon my french!
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Post by Pseudomuse on Apr 3, 2005 2:02:05 GMT -8
thank you. yeah i still haven't figured out a title.
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Post by Queen of Rain on Apr 3, 2005 7:10:58 GMT -8
yep another of your masterpieces!!! focused and amazing... title, hmm, go for somehting which emphasises the paradox of peter pan and how this dream is not perfect..
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Post by Pseudomuse on Apr 7, 2005 14:09:41 GMT -8
thank you for the loverly review...I really did enjoy writing this poem, I was at the beach babysitting my cousins kids and all I have to write on was a white paper bag, i'd bought buttons in earlier. thought i'd share this. thanks again.
lurf
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Post by ScarletMornings on Apr 30, 2005 19:26:46 GMT -8
on a WHITE PAPER BAG? my god, you are a genius. the most creative thing i've ever written on was, oh wait. . . nothing.
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Post by louise on May 2, 2005 2:39:34 GMT -8
It is great indeed. suggestion for a title: nostalgian dreams or something. Nostalgia always makes things look better than they were, even pain can get something romantic.
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Post by Queen of Rain on May 2, 2005 5:37:09 GMT -8
spontaneous things that are still processed with it in mind to create good poetry are usually the best poems.. i always end up writing on the back side of reciepts...
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