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Father
Mar 20, 2005 13:14:26 GMT -8
Post by Queen of Rain on Mar 20, 2005 13:14:26 GMT -8
Father
Do you know the colour
Of my eyes
If I close them for an eternity
Running past me
The perfect rush
Time for lovely lies
Children with bluer eyes
Think you love, as you say you do
Yet I’m glazed by stern stare, cold
The Fur I got was just a lie
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Father
Mar 26, 2005 20:13:18 GMT -8
Post by Ramona on Mar 26, 2005 20:13:18 GMT -8
I think the ending was a bit abrupt, ubt the rest of it was a very good poem.
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Father
Mar 29, 2005 10:31:39 GMT -8
Post by kaidanasnan on Mar 29, 2005 10:31:39 GMT -8
It was okay, bt as was said before, the ending was abrupt. Otherwise it wasn't bad.
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Father
Apr 3, 2005 0:26:47 GMT -8
Post by Queen of Rain on Apr 3, 2005 0:26:47 GMT -8
yea ending is bad, but i wrote this poem years ago...
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Father
Apr 7, 2005 20:18:03 GMT -8
Post by blutmond on Apr 7, 2005 20:18:03 GMT -8
Good poem but I have to agree with the others.. The ending was abrupt.. But its good!
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Father
Apr 8, 2005 12:09:36 GMT -8
Post by Queen of Rain on Apr 8, 2005 12:09:36 GMT -8
actaully it isnt good, so cliche i realise when i read it now som lines are ok but gaah.. go read some of my newer better poems instead..  |
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