Can'think of a Name for this....

[midnightwhitewolf]

What could be wrong when Nobody cares?
I'm not gonna say "It's not fair"
Because it is, I forced htis upon myself;
Searching, and Hoping for Undyeing wealth
To be loved by those around me, Was too much to ask
I shielded myself with this Childish mask
Dislike surrounded me, I felt it growing strong
I was broken inside, it just felt so wrong
But a light came into the darkness; shining so true
I followed that light, and then I found you.
You led me back into my life
Back through the swamps of Betrayal and Strife
alongside the rivers of Dead hope, and Ended Glee
You Revived all these feelings inside of me.

Lol, sooo, i origionally wrote this poem for a contest I was entering at my school, but never entered it... Oh Well. Give me your Ideas!

[darktears]

This poem is sweet too. I enjoyed it, nice work!

[frontpagenews]

I liked this poem it was better than the last one I read. The ryhming in this one is alot better much more natural. I also liked the imagery. I must say that the rythm could be better. But not too shabby. Keep up the good work!

[darkangel]

i love this poem. Its so sweet! i know you said you wrote it for a contest, but it also sounds like you wrote it for someone you love. ;D

[Queen of Rain]

this poem was overally good, but it in parts lacked personality and seemed to aim to sound big and importand by using large words ´starting with capilat letters.. but it u look past it especially the ned of the poem gets really sweet