For Thirteen Days I Could Be Your Bride

[Queen of Rain]

For Thirteen Days I Could Be Your Bride

I dream I’m your Desire,
apple-eater, bloodred lips
Touch you with my fingertips,
for thirteen days I’ll be your bride

Paradise in sunset,
and nakedness could be our home
as long as passionsfruits are ripe
My body could be your shelter

Sun sets as autumn approaches
The fourteenth night and life will go on,
enjoy september and remember me
Kisses sparkle – and fly away

[Ramona]

I liked this a lot, the imagery was fantastic.

[frontpagenews]

I quite agree. Wonderful imagery rather vivid. I absolutely loved the last stanza. I wonder maybe you could do something with the line "and nakedness could be our home" it doesnt seem to fit with the vibe of the poem.

[behindTHEmask]

I enjoyed this one very much.
"Paradise in sunset,
and nakedness could be our home
as long as passionsfruits are ripe
My body could be your shelter."
That stanza is my favorite. The words just are beautiful.
Wonderful work.

[Pseudomuse]

gorgeous poem. I really like it...a lot. my favorite part was the first stanza, your word choice was so just perfect.

"I dream I’m your Desire,
apple-eater, bloodred lips
Touch you with my fingertips,
for thirteen days I’ll be your bride"

keep it up.

PM