Please Don't

[darktears]

There are secrets that I hide,
Secrets you musn't know.
Some are truth and some are lies.
Please just walk away,
just leave me here.
Cause you must go.

Every day I have some troubles,
But Im sure to get through them.
Please confide me,
And I will help you,
to get through your problems.
Please just talk to me.
Because I want to help.

*Chorus*
Please just let me know.
No more secrets or lies
About yourself.
Don't, Don't hide from me.
I can help you, baby.
Please don't scream.

Don't matter what time you ask.
Ill be there, by your side.
To guide you,
To hold you,
To love you.

I can see past you,
And you image you hold.
Infront of friends
And people you know.
Id love to break the silence
But I know,
But I know I can't.

*Chorus*
Please just let me know.
No more secrets or lies
About yourself.
Don't, Don't hide from me.
I can help you, baby.
Please don't cry.

I know your trying,
To be happy.
Please tell me what is wrong.
Please tell me what is wrong.
So I can dry your tears.
So I can get rid of your fears.
So I can be your angel.
So I can speak to you.
So I know what's wrong now,
Please let me help you.

*Chorus*
Please just let me know.
No more secrets or lies
About yourself.
Don't, Don't hide from me.
I can help you, baby.
Please do love me.
I know you love me.
I know you love me.
I know you cry.
I know you care.
I know your beautiful.
I know your mine,
All mine.
Love you forever.

[Ramona]

Cause you must go.
"Must" seems out of place here because the rest of the first stanza is more casual in tone.

Please just let me know.
No more secrets or lies
About yourself.
Don't, Don't hide from me.
I can help you, baby.
Please don't scream.
I LOVE how you transition to "please don't scream" here, it's kind of sudden, but it's a subtle surprise.

Id love to break the silence
But I know,
But I know I can't.
Very nice work here. Beautiful.

So I can dry your tears.
So I can get rid of your fears.
So I can be your angel.
So I can speak to you.
So I know what's wrong now,
these lines all seem kind of overused to me.

I know you cry.
Nice. Humanizing.

I'm amazed at how much you've improved since you first joined this forum.

[darktears]

Thank you very much. I reread what I had written and I agree with you. I'll work on this alot.

[Ramona]

Cool, because i think there were some really awesome parts in there.