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Post by Confusion on Jul 14, 2005 7:46:41 GMT -8
I splash my face with cold water and look up into the mirror at my haunting, sunken face. I see my ghostly pale skin, black eyeliner smudged down my cheeks, hair wild and ungroomed, my face carrying an expression of fear and disgust at its own reflection.
I see my eyes; they've lost that cheerful glint which used to only belong to me. Now they are deep, sunken wrecks, misery imbedded within them.
I think back to myself just three years ago. What would she think of me now? I know how badly she thought of people like me. I know she had a plan for the future that she would not end up like this. Now for the first time she sees she really is me. This is me; this is her, the mess, the disgrace. She must have lost that plan, somewhere along the way.
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Post by Confusion on Jul 14, 2005 7:48:37 GMT -8
sooo... im rubbish at story writing, i can do beginnings and endings... but mine trail on and lose all meaning in the middle!
I'm quite pleased with this so far... i think it's quite a good opening.... but could you give me ideas on what kinda thing to continue from this with??
pleease... i would be soooooooooooo truely grateful, might actually turn into my first succesful story!
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Post by Confusion on Jul 20, 2005 6:36:26 GMT -8
ahhhh.......... no one has replied to this!! If you are reading this, please pleeeeease reply, i realli wanna turn this into a story!
I might post a reply on this of a basic story outline for this, and see if you guys have any suggestions!
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Post by Confusion on Jul 20, 2005 6:43:03 GMT -8
My story outline:
INTRODUCTION: just what i posted as what i have so far of the story... i think it's quite a good little openning bit, seperate from the rest!
hmmmmm..... i've just been trying to think of an order for bits i wanna include... but i can't realli think of an order, cos i think i want that intro bit i wrote to be at the very start, but be how the story ends....... so i guess (in no particular order (yet)) i'll just write all the bits im thinking of including, please suggest an order or adding / taking away bits to be included!
*perfect-ish girl.... black and white outlook on life etc
CHANGES
*fascinated by new 'depressed' friends
*cuts herself
*family rows
*drugs
*sex?? (not sure bout weather to include it as her actually having sex... maybe just doing 'stuff')
*drunk (lots)
......... i think they are all the ideas i have atm, please help!!!
*family rows
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Post by ScarletMornings on Aug 14, 2005 8:47:54 GMT -8
oh dear, i'm terrrrrible at things like this. but whatever you do, make sure you put a twist in this, because this is a very cliche topic. you should try and take it from another angle, maybe, just be careful with the cliche.
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Post by Confusion on Aug 28, 2005 0:39:10 GMT -8
yea i agree it could easily become cliche.. i think thats why im probably gonna keep it as a piece of prose... i also think its more effective like this than it would be as a story..
but i do want to write a story sometime!!!!
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