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Post by mswrite on Jan 28, 2006 9:13:13 GMT -8
If you want honesty...it's the same "emo" thing that too many people write.
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Post by mswrite on Jan 19, 2005 16:56:48 GMT -8
Thanks to you both for the comment. It's nice to get some good criticism. some of my friends are into writing but they don't really give good criticism--they always say it's "good" and that's about it. So this is nice. Glad you both liked it. I do realize it turned out pretty religious. When I started out, the intent was to have something to do with hope, you know? I guess I just like the idea of angels. And your comments help me like it more and more! Thanks.
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Post by mswrite on Jan 17, 2005 12:28:52 GMT -8
When you’re lost in your sorrows and it feels Like you can’t go on When the pain gets too much and the roads gets too rough You want it to be done Just let go of you life, No more tears, no more strife Fall away and your heart will be cleansed So it seems…<br> [Chorus] Keep holding on Have faith in your heart And reach for the light in the rain Don’t forget they are there Reaching out for your tears And watching each step that you take There are angels In the dead of night There are angels When nothing goes right There are angels To wipe away your tears There are angels In each breath that we take There are angels In each smile that has come from the heart There are angels…<br>[no more chorus] When a child can die in the blink of an eye Wonder if there’s a god When a father will leave a family cold in the streets Where did the world go wrong? If one more life disappeared Mother, daughter or son, Who would notice? Who would care? [Chorus] When you feel like your heart is caving in Don’t forget there are angels When you’re losing all sight of what you have Don’t forget there are angels When you think nothing remains to hold on to And this world is too cruel to belong to Don’t forget There are angels To wipe away your tears They are waiting To lock away your fears They are watching To brighten your life with a heavenly breath There are angels. So it's a little odd and not too loaded with "charged words" or "awesome analogies". But then again, most of my poetry/songs are like that. And it rhymes sometimes, not always. Sometimes rhyming sounds stupid, but sometimes it's unintentional and ends up sounding good. I wouldn't mind a bit of feedback...
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Post by mswrite on Jan 28, 2006 8:48:52 GMT -8
Brilliant. Absolutely brilliant.
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Post by mswrite on Dec 30, 2005 9:10:54 GMT -8
I say writer's block is:
1)When I am not sure where to go next with the plot of my story. 2)When I know what I want to say but not how to say it. 3)When I stare at my computer screen for hours just trying to figure out what to write.
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Post by mswrite on Nov 29, 2005 19:51:32 GMT -8
203. Start by writing anything: the last paragraph of another paper; a letter to a friend; “I hate writing” over and over. The trick is to get the physical action underway so the brain will follow.
204. Read through some of your other completed writings or read a bit before where you're stuck.
205.Give yourself 15 minutes to be totally free of your "inner critic." Set a timer and start typing - write whatever pops into your head, even if it is total gibberish, a shopping list, words that rhyme, favorite sayings or lyrics - whatever. The idea is to get your creative juices flowing. Some writers do this exercise every day before they begin writing.
206. This works well for me. Write a personal narrative, or part of one, about some event, recent or past, large or small, happy or sad, that has occured in your life. Write out your emotions, your thoughts, etc. It just helps to get the writing spurt started. It could be about anything from winning a big award to buying a gallon of ice cream.
207. this is really fun for me because I'm a people-watcher. watching people gives me ideas, and it's amusing. Go to a public place(park, library, museum, zoo, etc.) and sit down and watch the people around you for as long as you want. Take good notes or just study them; it will help give you ideas. Or go to the grocery store and guess details about people's lives based on what they pick up, who's with them, and what's in their cart(my "Motherhood" story came from something like this when my mother dragged me to the store with her.)
208. Ok...this is actually something I found on a website that someone wrote. It's called, "Ten Tips for Beating Writer's Block! (A Prose Parody)" by Bruce W Niedt 1. Find someone to pine over, and after two weeks, write a poem about unrequited love.
2. Beat your head against a wall, then write about how poetry comes from suffering.
3. Use the following words in a poem: chicken, Bundt cake, defibrillator, blastocyst, Skippy, rictus, Monongehela, gewgaw, Industrial Revolution, budgie, Weltschmerz.
4. Compose a poem using Magnetic Poetry©. Do not, however, try to submit your refrigerator to a poetry journal.
5. Write a poem about writer’s block. Then write a poem about writing a poem about writer’s block.
6. If, as the old adage goes, you “write what you know”, and if you know nothing, then write about nothing. It could be a poem about nothing. You could be the Seinfeld of poetry!
7. Find an obscure poem by someone else on the internet, change a word or two if you like, and take credit for it as your poem. Be sure you have a good lawyer.
8. Keep a notepad by your bed. Then next time you awake with a great dream-inspired idea, jot it down. And spend the next couple of days trying to figure out what the heck you were talking about.
9. Win a Pulitzer Prize, or become Poet Laureate, so you can write whatever you want, ecause whatever you write, half your readers will applaud your genius, and the other half will complain about how your work has declined since you won the big prize.
10. Console yourself with the fact that there really is no such thing as “writer’s block”. Then get off your duff and WRITE!
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Post by mswrite on Dec 2, 2007 19:33:43 GMT -8
I've been gone for at least a year...not because I stopped writing, I just kind of forgot about this place when I got really busy. I rejoined today though, and posted a few things...so I hope this place is still semi-active. I need the criticism! and after posting things I realized that the dates on most other posts were 2006...and I was very saddened to see that.
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Post by mswrite on Nov 25, 2005 14:39:13 GMT -8
Mine is brown with natually lighter highlights, I'd love it to be a reddish-brown(more red than brown).
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Post by mswrite on Apr 22, 2006 19:27:40 GMT -8
Just thought I'd throw this out there. I have a favorite "Baby Names" site(my mom freaked the first time she saw me on it). Usually I look for meanings that describe my character. Or sometimes I know I want a name starting or ending with a certain letter so I'll look for that. another thing I like to do is come up with one word to describe my character and translate it into another language. That works better for last names. Sometimes a name will just pop into my head so I write it down for the next time I need a name for a story. I usually will change names as I write the story. I find it easier to make up names in my fantasy/otherworld stories because I get to make up my own rules of pronunciation and such. Just a thought.
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Post by mswrite on Feb 9, 2006 14:48:41 GMT -8
this one is awesome. Way to go, Pseudomuse!
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Post by mswrite on Jan 28, 2006 8:57:25 GMT -8
I hadn't seen it before, but it's really good. I like the...what's the word...I can't think of it now, but I like the way sentences are split up with just one or two words per line sometimes.
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Post by mswrite on Dec 2, 2007 19:05:55 GMT -8
wow...I really wrote this two years ago? I just rejoined the community after being gone for a long time...longer than I thought, apparently. I still love this story. Glad you all liked it too!
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Post by mswrite on Dec 30, 2005 9:06:58 GMT -8
If you want honest criticism...there are way too many stories about little orphaned girls who are magical and get caught up in magic and such. Yours sounds a lot like Philip Pullman's Dark Materials series (read them if you haven't). Also, you need to develop your plot. What happens when she's discovered a witch? does she run, or does she get captured? how does she get away? it just needs a lot more uniqueness and development.
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Post by mswrite on Nov 29, 2005 19:25:51 GMT -8
This song is just so true sometimes, and it has good imagery. The melody itself is beautiful
I wish I had what I needed To be on my own 'Cause I feel so defeated And I'm feeling alone
And it all seems so helpless And I have no plans I'm a plane in the sunset With nowhere to land
And all I see It could never make me happy And all my sand castles Spend their time collapsing
Let me know that You hear me Let me know Your touch Let me know that You love me Let that be enough
It's my birthday tomorrow No one here could now I was born this Thursday 22 years ago
And I feel stuck Watching history repeating Yeah, who am I? Just a kid who knows he's needy
Let me know that You hear me Let me know Your touch Let me know that You love me And let that be enough.
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Post by mswrite on Nov 30, 2005 19:23:08 GMT -8
I'm looking for one that's already written, preferably. Thanks for that suggestion, it's kind of what I'm looking for.
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