Here (?)

[Ramona]

This was written while thinking about someone who I had more of a crush on 'cause she was so gorgeous, but who I never really saw myself with. Y'all know how it is.
I'm not real sure about the title, but it seems fitting for right the time being.
Anyway, it's kind of an idealist poem, and I tried to convey the feeling of a kodachrome picture. Constructive criticism welcome!

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“I like where you sleep, when you sleep next to me.
I like where we are.

Here.”
-“Here (In Your Arms)” by Hellogoodbye


I look at things
through sun-golden glasses
people say I’m different
and I am

your hair lays out on the grass
in intricate patterns like constellations
you look at things
like I’ve never seen them
people say you’re different
and you are

my finger finds its way
to a lock of your hair
beautiful tendril
it twirls

I notice the white lace against your brown skin
contrast
the earth is warm but your mouth is warmer

[cry,crayola.]

i like just the description throughout and the way you put words together to make this near tangible image.

i think the only thing that i don't like so much is the second to last stanza. it just feels a little out of place to me as compared to everything else written.