Cant think of title right now.

[darktears]

"Can I ask you a question?"
I said aloud.
You look up.
Answering, quickly, suddenly.
I stare into your large blue eyes and sigh.
"When your around me,
Do stars begin to fall?
Do you feel something,
You've never felt before?"
Yes, It may seem silly of me to ask.
But I need to know the truth.
I need to know,
Because when I'm around you,
I feel special.
I feel like I'm the only one for you
Because your the only one for me.
You take my hand so softly,
And smile.
My heart races.
My eyes shut and all I can hear
Is silence.
To me it seems there is only us two.
This secret bubble formed around us,
To block us from everything else.
"Yes."
You whisper the answer to me.
A sigh of relief surges through my veins.
And I open my eyes to see you.
A giggle and a laugh.
I smile.

[Robin]

Very sweet. It's on the cliche side, but you don't need an extremely original topic to make a good poem, especially not when you're talented as you are.

"Because your the only one for me."

This was the only line that really bothered me, not just because the wrong form of your was used, but because it didn't have much creativity put into it. I'm sure that you could find a better way to say this.

But then again, because this poem is in such simple words, it does fit into the big scheme of things.

[darktears]

Thank You Very much:)

[cry,crayola.]

yeah, i thought it was a tad cliche, but still good all the same.

i do think it would've sounded better from an emotional side, like, her thinking it instead of saying it. i probably suggest that because that's how i write and tend to look at things in my mind and ask myself what i'd have done. but this still works for ya!

i think you have an amazing thing here. if ya added a tad bit more imagery i think it could be great! i like the emotion that comes from this. it makes me smile.

i liked it

[darktears]

Thank you!